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Matt Bellamy

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Heartbreak

    Hi! I feel your emotion through this poem but I think that some parts of it are a little cliché - comparing tears to rain, for example. As Lavvi said, ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Senseless

    Hello! I think this is a good start and where you put your explanation that the person gets cut off by a bullet could be really good. But if you ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Behind Closed Doors and Inside Loud Houses.

    Hello! Sorry if I repeat anything that's been previously said, but if I read other people's comments I might not review anything for fear of not saying anything new! I ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: twistfaint<3

    Hi! I love your tone in this piece. It just sounds really good when I read it in my head. You use some really good description an imagery, and... I ...

    Apr 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Never Back Down

    Hi there! Firstly, I like the message your poem sends, so that's a plus. And your format is fine, but your first and last lines are a lot longer than ...

    Apr 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Hi My Name Is

    This is a pretty original idea - I've never read a poem from the point of view of an emotion before. The first line sounds slightly too casual but I ...

    Apr 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Screams

    I think this is quite well-written. I like the way you rhymed seams and screams at the end; it made it seem very final. It's quite emotional without being over ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: headstart

    Hey there! I like this and I think your rhyming in particular is very good. I think it would be easier to read though if it was split into stanzas, ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Respectfully Moving On

    Hey! I really like the tone to this, it's very emotional and well-written. Two nit-picks though, I think you don't need any commas at all in this line: "It was, ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Someday

    This is very bittersweet and emotional, and very well written. If I were your boyfriend I'd love to be given it! I'm sure he'll be able to relate to it, ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Bed, Pure

    I really like this, and I think the best bit is how it ended. I think comparing the innocence of virginity to pure white snow is a little bit cliché, ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Recoil

    Hey! This is pretty descriptive, you used both description and emotion pretty well with this piece. However you say cracked lips a couple of times and I think you only ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: An Ode to Google

    Hello! A light-hearted and fun poem, here. I'm unsure of the rhyming of need and fee though, and I have visions of a student doing their homework and scrubbing their ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Turmoil

    Hey! I like the simplicity of this poem. One thing I noticed was that it is all in past tense and then you say: "Your eyes are pools of light, ...

    Jan 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Technicalities

    I thought this was pretty creative, and I enjoyed it, being the computer geek that I am! Though I'm not sure that using so much computery metaphor stuff makes the ...

    Jan 30, 2011


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